May 26, 2008

Coffee Grounds (deb)

Coffee Grounds


If I were to hold my heart in your kitchen,
with its pink curtains and chartreuse stove and plastic
burners glowing supernatural orange, I’d fire up
the griddle and open freezer doors. Streaming hot milk,
I would call you on the backline, I’d use the number
I’d found as the train lurched by, in my favorite blue
journal I’d sketch with my favorite black pencil.
There I would copy – I’m only a scribe decorating sacred text –
the code messaged on a billboard selling milk from happy,
only happy black and white cows. It was you singing to me,
streaming time. But the lead broke and the number was ruined.
Take down the election posters, the contest has been turned
over to substitute-teachers. Ride the bus backwards
from one end of the line to the other and put expired
stamps on postcards addressed to long-dead virgin aunts.
Turn the compost pile and make a fresh pot, streaming hot.

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This strange poem-like thing is a first draft from a free-write inspired by Read Write Poem's prompt for this week, which was to let go of my imagination, as in let it loose. Go read other's personal interpretation on this theme; there ought to be some interesting poetry let out and about.

I think that while this is good for stretching some stiff imaginary muscles, my poem is only an exercise. I think I'll try more of this, but I won't post it when it's quite so raw.

Of course, while I've been writing I've also been staying up late tonight, waiting for one of my cats to come home. Silly girl. She's in now, so I can retire in peace.

14 Comments:

Jo said...

I think you are being too harsh on yourself, what you describe as only an exercise is fresh, fluid, inventive.

...deb said...

Thanks, Jo. I guess it's an exercise that is productive then. I can't always evaluate my own work when it is so fresh, so I appreciate the atta-poet-gal.

sister AE said...

I like the way the color descriptions (particularly at the beginning) make this seem more concrete. And the "happy, only happy black and white cows" made me think of those cheese ads on TV.

I would love to see some of the parts of this taken to their logical (or perhaps illogical) extremes. You have some tantalizing images and turns of phrase here.

Dale said...

The first line is haunting. I'm looking forward to seeing what you make of this. At least a couple, maybe three poems, struggling to be born here, I think.

Linda Jacobs said...

I'm in awe! I could never come up with so many unique images! This poem is like a suitcase ready to be opened and the contents used whenever you need them.

mariacristina said...

The surreal combination of homey images, strong colors, and stream of consciousness makes this poem a true adventure. I really enjoyed reading it, and have even read it a few times to capture more of the many scenes. It's a delightful poem.

Whirling Dervish said...

If this is what you call raw...I'm embarassed to call my own work poetry.

Incredible poem.

Dave said...

I like this, too. Is it my imagination, though, or does it really want to be a prose poem?

polkadotwitch said...

one thing i really like to do with this "imagination gone wild" (yes, the similarity to "girls gone wild" is intended) is to go on and on and on. lines and lines and lines. and i usually end up with several images that end up in other pieces. so in your piece, i saw lots of great stuff that even if you consider this one only an exercise, may crop up in a few other poems.

and there's a poem in your explanation as well: can't go to bed til the cat comes home ...

...deb said...

Sister AE: Colors add so much, don't they? I'm thankful I dream in color. I actually dreamed in animation once, a long time ago. I wish I still did.

Dale: You're right about how many poems are layered in there!

Linda: Oh, I dunno. I guess I like casseroles. I think there are too many ingredients in this one, but it'll be fun to play with.

Christine: Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

WD: You are such a silly. You have more emotional heart than I can muster. But thank you for believing in me. :-)

Dave: You're right. It was and it should be again. Good eyes and ears. (Glad you liked it.)

Witchy: I like that idea. All of them :-)...poets gone wild.

Nathan1313 said...

This doesn't seem so raw. I especially like the last six lines. Clever, imaginative and poignant--a good combination.

anthonynorth said...

I'm not usually one for stream of consciousness style writing, but this worked well.

Jon said...

This becomes very Beat-like in the last half, doesn't it? (I say that as a good thing.) I love this poem of possibilities and permeable boundaries. Rich and fecund like the compost pile it envisions.

one more believer said...

enjoyed it immensely... made me laugh thinkin of those happy cow commercials... who knew being a cow could be so creative.. ride the bus backwards... terrific